From Boyfriend to Brother

[Tafara]

Intro:

Amelia Trick and Jason Reeves are a teenage couple lost in the romantic embrace of each other’s arms. Not a day goes by that they aren’t over at each other’s houses making out while a movie plays without an audience¬. It’s obvious isn’t it? They’re head over heels in love. It’s all a big joke to them when Amelia’s single mother meets Jason’s single father, and there’s an instant connection of love and lust. In fact, Amelia and Jason are ecstatic and humored by there parent’s recent relationship. They both agree their parents are major freaks after coming home from yet another double date. Finally, that joke slaps them across the face. Here comes the bride… their parents are getting married.

So, you tell, me. What happens when you’re boyfriend turns into your brother?


Hey I feel like writing a novel that I might actually send into publishers if it's good enough. haha. I really am in love with the plotline I'm thinking of. So I'm going to write some rough draft chapters (meaning they won't be perfect) and I'd just like some advice. Also I'll pay tricks if anyone ever opens an editing office in the downtown area. lol. But if you'd like to give suggestions here, I'd be very appreciative. =)

Updates July 23: Added 1st chapter. August 6th: Coming Soon 2nd chapter.

[complicatedxally]

This sounds like it'll be something worth reading x) can't wait!

[hilary]

sounds really interesting, love the idea

[Tafara]

Chapter One.

“Shut up. You’re kidding!” Amelia squealed, playfully slapping her boyfriend across the chest.

“No way. He told me yesterday,” Jason replied. “Ryan totally has the hots for you.”

“That’s crazy. I woulda’ never guessed.”

Ryan Creeter was Jason’s best friend since the fourth grade. They’d been on the same baseball team since sixth grade; Jason was the catcher and Ryan played third base. In 8th grade, their team won the Treyville League Championship– Jason had batted in the winning run. This year, they’ll be playing for Treyville High–well, on the freshman team at least.

Ever since Amelia had started dating Jason– about seven months ago– she’d become real good friends with Ryan. She liked the way he didn’t talk very much, but instead listen to her ramble on about her life for hours at a time. And when Jason, Ryan, and she were watching baseball, he’d always take the initiative to explain the game strategy, player’s backgrounds, and more. Jason, she thought to herself, is deaf to all sounds other than what’s emitting from the TV– I don’t think he even hears me when I ask.

“Don’t tell him I told you, though,” Jason squeezed Amelia tight and gave her a light peck on the cheek. “Just act like you don’t know.”

“Oh, because you know how easy that is,” she laughed and pulled away. “Hey, you know what? I think him and Kelly would go good together. Don’t ya’ think?”

Amelia, Kelly, and another friend, Marissa, were very close. Sure they had other aquaintances, but nothing was comparable to the friendship– no, the sisterhood– that they shared. And, of course, out of the group, Kelly has had the most boyfriends in a lifetime; she’s also had the shortest relationships as well.

“Kelly– Kelly Ray?!”

“Yeah. What’s wrong with that? She’s my friend, Jason, be a little more considerate.” Amelia replied, sounding annoyed. “But, anyways, you know how Ryan doesn’t talk. She could certainly make up for that.”

“Yeah, but Ryan’s first girlfriend can’t be loud and obnoxious like she is. He’d freak out. Hell, I’d freak out,” he said, but quickly added, “but she is nice.”

Amelia looked at him and rolled her eyes.

“What?”

“You know what,” she rolled her eyes again and grinned slightly.

“No I don’t…” he smiled and ruffled her hair. “You’re silly.”

“Don’t! My hair!” She fought his hands from her head, but they had already moved to her ribs. She tried to get away, but he wrapped one arm around her waist and tickled her with the other. “Jason– Jason! Quit!”

“I’m the cookie monster– or– whatever!” he laughed and let up, “the tickle monster– you know.”

“Psshhh. You loser. That was so corny,” Amelia laughed. She sat down on the couch and started fumbling through the DVDs laying out on the coffee table. “Say, what movie would ya’ like to watch?”

Jason took a seat on the couch close to her and put an arm around her shoulder. He smirked, “doesn’t matter– it’s not like we’ll be watching it anyways.”

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Any suggestions?

[Jedi Kay]

I like it so far.
I think you should add character descriptions. You know, like what the characters look like.
Just suggesting.

[Tafara]

K thanks, I forgot. Do you think it should be in the first chapter, or can it be in the second?

[shotatlove]

This is hott. The idea would make an awesome movie, too.

[Jedi Kay]

Jul 25, 2008 19:22:05 GMT -5 Tafara said:

K thanks, I forgot. Do you think it should be in the first chapter, or can it be in the second?

I would say first.

[Tafara]

I put the descriptions in the 2nd chapter, because I found a way that I could add them without being like "Amelia has brown hair, blue eyes, and ..." So I hope it'll be alright. I'm adding the second chapter on August 6th =)

[Jedi Kay]

YAY!

[Tafara]

Hey sorry about the August 6th not happening, I decided to make the second chapter longer. School is starting up for me soon, and I have a few things to do, so this might be more around the end of the month. Hope no one's freaking out or anything. haha. =P But trust me, I am still working on it =D haha.

[facexdown]

Awesome! I really like it! I can't wait for the 2nd chapter!
Your a great author Tafara! =)

[shotatlove]

if you're going to make us wait then it better be good. -_-

hahaha jk jk jk.